posted by [identity profile] minervacat.livejournal.com at 10:18am on 26/07/2006
[livejournal.com profile] insidian told me, via email, that this doesn't feel done to me because i just haven't come to terms with the fact that it is finished *grin*, so maybe i'm just projecting my own issues onto this and they're bleeding through to you. :) i'm not sure i'd like to write a sequel, either way; i sort of feel that that's where all of the gangsters live is the other half to this, even if the details of the stories aren't all the same. so i guess i feel like i already did write the second half? hmmm.

i kind of like the idea of ray taking night classes to finish up the credits he needed to go to the academy; i used to live upstairs from a cpd shift supervisor, and you can sit for the entrance exam without having those credits, as long as you get them before you finish the academy, so there's always that option for ray. :) and i know nothing about astrology so i can't speak to ray being a typical virgo, but i thought there was ... well, chicago julys are long and hot and the city sort of hums with this restless energy that it doesn't always have during the rest of the year, and ray born in that month just made sense to me. but, you know, that's just me.

thank you so much for these lovely commentsl i'm so glad you enjoyed this.
 
posted by [identity profile] j-s-cavalcante.livejournal.com at 07:17pm on 26/07/2006
i'm not sure i'd like to write a sequel, either way; i sort of feel that "that's where all of the gangsters live" is the other half to this, even if the details of the stories aren't all the same. so i guess i feel like i already did write the second half? hmmm.

Oh, that makes sense. Yes, see, I do think this is fine as a complete story. Maybe you left some cues in there somewhere that reflect your indecision at the time. It's really very fine to end with his taking the Vecchio gig.

(And darn--I have a WIP with the very same title that I started during the undercover challenge at ds_flashfiction and didn't finish. I'll change the title. :)

i kind of like the idea of ray taking night classes to finish up the credits he needed to go to the academy; i used to live upstairs from a cpd shift supervisor, and you can sit for the entrance exam without having those credits, as long as you get them before you finish the academy, so there's always that option for ray. :)

Oh, I love that. That little detail has been bugging me in my own work. Okay if I use the idea?

and i know nothing about astrology so i can't speak to ray being a typical virgo,

Like I said, I'm a dork, no one else will care, and the stuff with the fire hydrant, etc., is terrific.

chicago julys are long and hot and the city sort of hums with this restless energy that it doesn't always have during the rest of the year, and ray born in that month just made sense to me. but, you know, that's just me.

No, I get that; you're right; it totally works in the story. It's just that with a little astrology background, I've been wondering about his birth chart and how he might express that, and wondering about his birthday (since we know the one date it isn't is May 28. Like I said. Dork. Sorry. :)

Anyway, I lovelovelove Ray, and your work always brings the Ray love closer (and the Chicago love), so I adore your writing.
 
posted by [identity profile] minervacat.livejournal.com at 11:03pm on 26/07/2006
titles are free creatures; don't change yours on my account, okay? :)

Oh, I love that. That little detail has been bugging me in my own work. Okay if I use the idea?

oh, gods, of COURSE. i'll probably never use it in anything myself, and i'd love to see it go to a good home. i used to sit in the laundry room and pick my neighbor's brain about the real details of the cpd, and i've never used any of them. (although i did consider applying to take the exam for the academy for a while, but never did.) i'd love to see the stuff i learned get used.

and thank you, thank you, thank you, again. :)

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